[squeals in fanboi] π Edgar, my beloved~! Gosh, can he pleeaase cook for me in that outfit every morning?? π³ Love the new CG, btw~ π
I'm enjoying the world building xou've added π but might I make a suggestion? The whole explanation about ferals, purbloods, mythicals, hybrids, and originals was a bit confusing π¬ I mean, I understood the whole concept, but I think that scene could use a little attention.
RTS continues to be a feel good VN for me βΊοΈ and I'm excited for what comes next! π Keep up the good work~!
Thank you!! β₯ β₯ β₯ This is the kind of comments I like the most (on the same level as compliments :B), but really, they help me a lot!
The world I created is shared with three other stories, and sometimes I forget to clarify things/explain properly what was not yet said in them but in the others. So. again, thanks for pointing out this detail! For me it's very difficult to identify what might be off and sometimes it's frustrating to know that something is wrong but not knowing what exactly xD
I was going to add images next to a diagram style explanation, but I didn't get there with the times. As well as the gallery which, despite being half functional, is not really ready yet heh~
Needless to say, I'm working on that part to make it easier to understand :D
Xou're very much welcome π always happy to help another writer. And I totally get where xou're coming from, especially when xour story has a colourful history π sometimes xou wonder if xou wrote it down in the actual tale, in a spin off of the original story, or if xou left all that extra information inside of xour head π
The diagram idea could work very well, and it would certainly add something fun and different to xour VN, but I do think all that scene needs is another 1nce over π all the information is already there, so just a little rearranging and clarifying certain points will make it cohesive.
And it's nice to know it's taken 3hree different stories to come to this point! π If xou're anything like me, then I'm sure xour other tales have helped to build the foundations of the universe xou've created π
I might have questions later if I remember in any case chapter 1 successfully I am still impressed with the efforts you are making on this VN I hope you will have a large community that will follow you in future updates up to date
I'm really happy to finally make this vn :D I had the story written for a long time but never gathered courage and time to make it a reality.
For now, having these comments are more than enough for me, seriously, I'm so glad to get your opinions and that you all like the characters as much as I do!
Thanks again for your comments! And I'm here to answer any questions (as long as they don't involve spoilers hehe) :B
At least he has company (even if he didn't want to stay inside). At the beginning of the next chapter there will be a consolation prize and more explanations :D
Well it was hmm I would say hmm should I even comment no it was nice and cool chapter 1 :)) Even if we couldn't talk with the other characters a moment when he goes to have a cup of coffee or tea :(
I'm very flattered by your words, like seriously, thank you so muuuuuuuuch!!! β₯
And I'm so glad you liked the first steps of the vn too!
It's the first time I do one (even though I already have several stories written I never took them out of the paper) and the truth is that it makes me feel very excited :D
I hope it gets better and better as time goes by :3
I also hope you keep coming back every update! Even if you don't like something in the future, I'd love for you to experience it and give me your honest opinion!
So hello to start this VN and clean and nice and really incredible especially the story haha but the end is ouch but hey it's only the beginning and there are 2 characters favorites but I'm keeping it private for now :) but otherwise good job
Really cute and intriguing! βΊοΈ A few things can be touched up here and there, but it's a good start! π Danny and Leo are an hilarious pairing π they're so much fun~ π Will there be character routes? And if so, please tell me that Edgar will be 1ne! π
I like everything so far, but the scene in the beginning on the emergency staircase needs some attention. As a reader, it's a little jarring going from the dream sequence, into Adam's reality, and then straight into the fight with his father. A little breathing room between us meeting Adam and him running away will help readers settle into his character. Perhaps just a short paragraph about how he's feeling? Maybe why he snuck out there and fell asleep?
I really like what xou've got so far and am eagerly looking forward to more π
I really appreciate this kind of criticism! It helps me a lot to notice things that I wouldn't otherwise take into account. πΈ
I've already fixed the beginning, rearranging Adam's monologue a bit. I also adapted the prologue so that the characters have more development when they are introduced :D
There will be routes, yes! Plus little secrets and many 'side stories' in each one! :3
Eddy and Leo are my favorites, so I don't see why not start with my doggo π hehe
No problem π always happy to help another writer. I think xour VN has a lot of potential! π The sprites are cute and the story's fun, so I'm eager to see where xou might take this~
Sounds great! π Looking forward to the changes xou've made and even more so to spend time with each of the boys~ π keep up the good work!
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incredible I already love this VN
Thank you so much!! β₯
the route, of each character I have not yet finished but the route, basic and in addition chapter 3 with the CG of Dan and Adam is magnificent ^^
Thank you <3
just a question this VN and still relevant?
I just posted a notice about this. But, yes, I'm still working on the project :3
Thanks for stopping by!
-Ez3
I like Danny so much. I love me a Big Cat, he he!
[squeals in fanboi] π Edgar, my beloved~! Gosh, can he pleeaase cook for me in that outfit every morning?? π³ Love the new CG, btw~ π
I'm enjoying the world building xou've added π but might I make a suggestion? The whole explanation about ferals, purbloods, mythicals, hybrids, and originals was a bit confusing π¬ I mean, I understood the whole concept, but I think that scene could use a little attention.
RTS continues to be a feel good VN for me βΊοΈ and I'm excited for what comes next! π Keep up the good work~!
Hi there!
Thank you!! β₯ β₯ β₯ This is the kind of comments I like the most (on the same level as compliments :B), but really, they help me a lot!
The world I created is shared with three other stories, and sometimes I forget to clarify things/explain properly what was not yet said in them but in the others. So. again, thanks for pointing out this detail! For me it's very difficult to identify what might be off and sometimes it's frustrating to know that something is wrong but not knowing what exactly xD
I was going to add images next to a diagram style explanation, but I didn't get there with the times. As well as the gallery which, despite being half functional, is not really ready yet heh~
Needless to say, I'm working on that part to make it easier to understand :D
Xou're very much welcome π always happy to help another writer. And I totally get where xou're coming from, especially when xour story has a colourful history π sometimes xou wonder if xou wrote it down in the actual tale, in a spin off of the original story, or if xou left all that extra information inside of xour head π
The diagram idea could work very well, and it would certainly add something fun and different to xour VN, but I do think all that scene needs is another 1nce over π all the information is already there, so just a little rearranging and clarifying certain points will make it cohesive.
And it's nice to know it's taken 3hree different stories to come to this point! π If xou're anything like me, then I'm sure xour other tales have helped to build the foundations of the universe xou've created π
So far this VN is really good i love the story :D Keep up the good work!!
Thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu! β₯
Sorry for the 15 days delay on my reply! >_<
I work on the VN whenever I can so little by little everything is progressing well :D
I hope future updates will be to your liking as well :3
-Ez3
rich kids who worry about a house for Adam and others who force Adam to go to his quiet house brother u_u
I might have questions later if I remember in any case chapter 1 successfully I am still impressed with the efforts you are making on this VN I hope you will have a large community that will follow you in future updates up to date
Thank you!!
I'm really happy to finally make this vn :D I had the story written for a long time but never gathered courage and time to make it a reality.
For now, having these comments are more than enough for me, seriously, I'm so glad to get your opinions and that you all like the characters as much as I do!
Thanks again for your comments! And I'm here to answer any questions (as long as they don't involve spoilers hehe) :B
nop^^
We are here, we give you strength, we support you and for my current question I donβt know what to say yetπ€
At least he has company (even if he didn't want to stay inside). At the beginning of the next chapter there will be a consolation prize and more explanations :D
oh :3
Well it was hmm I would say hmm should I even comment no it was nice and cool chapter 1 :)) Even if we couldn't talk with the other characters a moment when he goes to have a cup of coffee or tea :(
I knooooooow! Sorry!!! :[
I had a lot to finish and had to make sacrifices. But I promise it will be ready soon along with some new tidbits!!!! :3
I... wow :'D
I'm very flattered by your words, like seriously, thank you so muuuuuuuuch!!! β₯
And I'm so glad you liked the first steps of the vn too!
It's the first time I do one (even though I already have several stories written I never took them out of the paper) and the truth is that it makes me feel very excited :D
I hope it gets better and better as time goes by :3
I also hope you keep coming back every update! Even if you don't like something in the future, I'd love for you to experience it and give me your honest opinion!
Again, thank you!! >u<
-Ez3
So hello to start this VN and clean and nice and really incredible especially the story haha but the end is ouch but hey it's only the beginning and there are 2 characters favorites but I'm keeping it private for now :) but otherwise good job
Hi there!! :]
Also thank you!!! I hope the more the story progresses the more you all will like it!!! :D
Chapters 1 and 2 will bring more interactions of the pjs, so you can get to know them a little more in depth :3
Really cute and intriguing! βΊοΈ A few things can be touched up here and there, but it's a good start! π Danny and Leo are an hilarious pairing π they're so much fun~ π Will there be character routes? And if so, please tell me that Edgar will be 1ne! π
I like everything so far, but the scene in the beginning on the emergency staircase needs some attention. As a reader, it's a little jarring going from the dream sequence, into Adam's reality, and then straight into the fight with his father. A little breathing room between us meeting Adam and him running away will help readers settle into his character. Perhaps just a short paragraph about how he's feeling? Maybe why he snuck out there and fell asleep?
I really like what xou've got so far and am eagerly looking forward to more π
Thank you very much for your comment! :]
I really appreciate this kind of criticism! It helps me a lot to notice things that I wouldn't otherwise take into account. πΈ
I've already fixed the beginning, rearranging Adam's monologue a bit. I also adapted the prologue so that the characters have more development when they are introduced :D
There will be routes, yes! Plus little secrets and many 'side stories' in each one! :3
Eddy and Leo are my favorites, so I don't see why not start with my doggo π hehe
No problem π always happy to help another writer. I think xour VN has a lot of potential! π The sprites are cute and the story's fun, so I'm eager to see where xou might take this~
Sounds great! π Looking forward to the changes xou've made and even more so to spend time with each of the boys~ π keep up the good work!
I love this VN and especially the story, I can't wait to see what happens next^^
Thank you!! :D
Next update coming in a week or two π
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Cute,I want to see more
Ty!! :D
I'm working on the first side story and (of course) the next chapter. But I think the side story will come in a couple of weeks π€
Good art!
Thanks!! :D
I Love it β₯, good work :3
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really good start and love the sprites. I'd recommend using more tags though, was hard to find this!
Thank you very muuuuch! :D
I was thinking of putting more but didn't know how many to actually use, some are redundant but maybe I should have thought better hehe~
I'll add more right now :3